definitely one of NGs top 10 MCs
man i definitely like the wordplay, the writing is lucid and very visual when I am reading along. and when Im not reading along with the lyrics, your clear pronunciation of the words verbally allow me to completely understand what you are saying... unlike many other aspiring mcs.
just get to fusing those two elements together --- the lucidity and visual imagery with the clarity of your voice. One thing I noticed is that you tend to stress everything that you say, and rightly so because each so is your masterpiece... however, if you get more highs and lows throughout the song, you can verbally highlight the main points of the track.
for example..
"Yea i show em how i live on the microphone"
(keep the line as is)
"Dont you know im explosive on microphones"
(highlight your explosiveness, like "im EXPLOSIVE on microphones)
"Borderline psychotic on microphones"
(tweak this line out a little, hint at the psychosis, throw in a schizophrenic laugh or something)
I don't mean change it drastically, just slight vocal accents on the already well written piece. Believe me, if you song like your feeling the words the youve written each time you perform or record a track, I guarantee more and more people will be feeling it too.
"to various cerebellums
i spare them then i tell em
if they mess up i will grill em
Roadkill them"
to me, this line was the best line in the song.